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11month3日雅思大作文

It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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标题问题类型及阐发


-许教师与班级学生合影-

首先标题里说the best way,审题的切入点是,虽然这是一个好的方式,但并不是最好的方式或唯一的方式,所以作者的不雅观点是不同意的。因为教育罪犯的话能够让他们不再犯,但是不能治理根本问题。因而本文从不同意的角度去论证。

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范文逐段解析

The rapid advancement that the 20th century has witnessed, especially in those countries with a market economy, has led to a larger income gap between different classes. As a result of the ever-increasing income gap crime rates have also dramatically increased, even in the most affluent countries. Although educating criminals is a great way to prevent criminals from re-offending, I personally believe that there are other solutions which can drastically prevent crimes in the first place.

开头用布景句引入主题,并表达不雅观点。能够同意也能够选择不同意,文章用否认的角度来论证。

Educating criminals can help them to reflect on their mistakes and calm their minds while they are in prison. Providing them work opportunities after they leave prison can give them the opportunity to start a new life and reintegrate into the society. However, these methods do not really solve the fundamental problem which is what caused the crimes in the first place.

主题段第一段采纳了让步段的形式,先承认一下教育罪犯的好处,和它的作用,并重述一下本人的不雅观点。

For example, with juvenile delinquency many teenagers commit crimes out of certain necessities. In a society where the rich get richer, the poor get poorer. Many people from certain societal backgrounds do not stand the chance of getting educated, thus many turn to crime and ignore the dire consequences. Free compulsory education for these teenagers is the only way to reduce the juvenile delinquency rates.

用第一个例子去辩说问题里的不雅观点,The rich get richer, the poor get poorer是经济学里的一个说法,有钱的越有钱,穷人越穷。这很可能也是很多没有条件的孩子没有法子去受良好教育,或者没有时机去承受良好教育的原因,所以很多国家一些贫困的青少年可能被迫去犯罪。所以不处置义务教育问题,很多青少年还是得不到受教育的问题,所以也导致去犯罪。

Apart from free compulsory education support for poor people is essential as well. According to research, Scandinavian countries like Sweden, Norway and Finland are amongst the safest countries in the world with the lowest crime rates. These countries also happen to be the ones that have the smallest income gap. In order to prevent crime and educate offenders we must pull more people out of poverty and close the income gap; providing support such as welfare benefits for the poor is absolutely essential.

用第二个论点加举例论证辩驳标题问题里教育罪犯不是最好的方法。北欧的一些兴隆国家,像瑞典,挪威和芬兰是世界上最宁静的国家的此中几个,而这些国家也刚好是贫富差距非常低的,正是因为这个原因,犯罪率非常的低,所以减少贫富差距,并且给穷人一些社保能够大大降低犯罪率。

In conclusion, despite the fact that educating criminals is a good way to prevent people from re-offending, in order to address the causes of crime in the first place, free compulsory education for the young as well as support for people from poorer backgrounds is absolutely vital.

总结,对作者的不雅观点加以强调。概括不雅观点,虽然教育罪犯是一个好的方法,但是不是能够处置根本问题的方法,义务教育及赐与贫穷人士协助才是能够处置根本问题的方法。

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